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vdwayne
05-19-2007, 02:11 PM
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x296/vdwayne/Batmanpg1.jpg http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x296/vdwayne/Batmanpg2.jpg http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x296/vdwayne/Batmanpg3.jpg

Hello, I'm new to this forums and just wanted to show some previous stuff I've done. I'm working on a book now that I'm getting ready to submit to publishers.

udgang99
05-20-2007, 05:09 AM
what happens on the last panels of the last page? Did Batman hit the Joker, and now they are both falling of the roof? You NEED you draw the panel where they smash together ... or whatever it is, like if Joker jumps to the side, or whatever. Now it's just jump and fall. What happens inbetween?! And why do they fall? Wouldn't Batman have a little more training to prevent him from falling like that?

Just asking questions here ... you art is fine at most places, I'm just having some problems with the story.

William Blankenship
05-20-2007, 07:53 AM
The work is nice. Some storytelling issues. My main problem with it is all the biuldings are so over-rendered that it looks like total decay or swiss cheese. Seriously, lighten up on those Mcfarlane-esque cross hatches on the building a bit, as it only works when something is fading into shadows. I used to do that alot too, and you don't need to. The perspective is great, and the buildings sell themselves without all that. I would like it twice as much with half the lines.