X-men - First Class

[di.straido]

Hi all... this pencil by Roger Cruz

http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q172/di_arte/Lapis/XMENFC4_pg1.jpg http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q172/di_arte/Arte/X-men---First-Class_Roger-C.jpg

[Jim Boyle]

i think you need to spot some more blacks in there to lead the eye around the page. good job with the lines, looking sharp.

[Spacious Interior]

Agreed. There are several spots (panel 3) where Jean could be seperated from the Jungle much more efficiantly by making solid the areas currently gray. What you have a is a good effect for shadowing, but in such a busy panel, it only makes the the details and focusses disolve into one another. The result is Jean's "X" belt the focus of the panel and directly mirrors Scot's in panel 2.

Looking at the pencils, there are places in both panels 1 and 3 that are filled in and certainly need to be solid black. However, I can see how Roger filled them with sketchy lines and it may look like what was intended was the result you produced. I for one don't have the patience to follow that closly over pencils like that so, MAJOR RESPECT!! But those are those times when it's ok to recite Banky's speach from the beginning of "Chasing Amy" and creatively add depth and dimension.

The linework is tight, serves it's purpose well, and if you add in the heavier black areas, will become more prevalent and "showy".

Not to pressure the issue, but I'd love to see it again with new blacks. Your linwork is deffinately worthy of it. :kewl:

[Miguel Marques]

Very good work. I don't know if that idea of the line in ash tone is a good exit to do. . . But in my vision the work is very good.

[Mecha]

I love what you did with panel 2, but yeah the other panels need to have more solids, maybe with some gradiated strokes in the furthest background to help give a little bit more depth, but the solids is what it is missing. Some parts on the characters uniforms it seems were intended for blacks with white highlights and they should have it rather than hatching. But other than that your inks are smooth and you handled the textures beautifully.

[Jimmy]

D,
Send me those pencils!! reyescreative@gmail.com

[quahkm]

I like it is... I seriously don't think adding blacks is necessary as the colorist can get the contrast back. Very clean job there, man


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[aerosoul]

Agreed, it is a very clean job. However, I believe the trees could have used less sketchy hatchwork and more solid black shadowing to take away from the busy-ness of the foreground action.

OR, keep the hatchwork, and make the outlines around the foreground characters much bolder to make them stand out.

Also, there is clearly places Roger marked to be solid that aren't filled in. I would definitely go through and re-fill those. I would make the outline around Jean a lot bolder as well. You can see the contrast of the 2nd panel of Cyclops how well it works together with Cyclops in the foreground and the black of the trees in the background, kind of a distinct contrast. In the final panel there is almost no depth. Add shadows to the branches of the trees where Roger had originally intended.

All in all, super clean work, very nice stuff! If you do decide to follow some of the crits posted on this thread, please repost the work! I'd love to see how it turns out.