Ex-wife pencils

[albone]

This is a reworking of a previous sketch. The gal is my main protagonist's ex-wife. Hit me with any comments or concerns.

http://www.workshedstudio.com/images/hold/charlottePerezi_pencils.jpg

[JonHParrish]

What are those lines on her right forearm ? That's my only critique. I didn't really notice it at first, but it looked like hair or something. Other than that, it's nice.

On a side note. When I first looked in the thread, I thought it was going to be a picture of your ex-wife. I was going to say, why'd you leave her, she's hawt !!! :D

Just kidding.

[Twyla]

Her breasts don't match. While this is actually pretty darned common in reality, it's rare to happen in comics. Is this intentional, perhaps? Seriously, though... Her right (viewer's left) breast looks considerably smaller and/or flatter than the other.

I was going to inquire about the markings on her left arm as well. I'm presuming that it is meant to be shading. If this is the case, it shouldn't be so regular.

[Lord Fejj]

Her left arm seems a little long (?)

[matrok]

sometimes it helps to look at a picture upside down to catch some flaws

[chaosgoat]

Someone call the fashion police, because those shoes are HIDEOUS. Go buy a fashion mag and do some research, son.

Also, her dress wouldn't ride like that, with one side very high and one side very low. Both sides of the hem would be about level, with the hem around the raised hip just slightly higher.

Her legs look a little bent like (, and the top part of her right (our left) leg shouldn't curve in like that. There's a small pad of fat and muscle at the top of the thigh, just below the crotch. Even skinny little supermodels have this small pad.

[albone]

Thanks everyone for posting.

First off, the hatching on her arm was clearly off. Either I should have did more hatching or none at all. :P

T-Reaper: In the story, she leaves the protagonist, but neither are angels.

Twyla: I think I goofed...I made the strap bigger on that side as well. I was trying to avoid the boob-sock-cup thing and wasn't paying attention. I think.

Lord Fejj: It's probably a little long, but she is leaning.

matrok: Most definately. Another thing that helps is posting it up online. I need to look it over online before posting it on boards.

chaosgoat: You're not alone with the shoes problem. It was recommended from the get-go to draw open toe, but I got lazy and invented some shoes, more's the pity.

Her dress isn't riding up, it's how it was cut. Or something, that's how it is though, though I did leave some frilly stuff off the ends.

I see what you mean with the leg, good looking out. :)

Thanks everyone!

[Don.Edwards]

Hey bro...

This is an overall nice effort, but they're right about the clogs, it ain't working your girl. Her right foot seems off, you might want to check that; her left hand doesn't quite do it for me...maybe the fingers are too short??...I don't see a problem with the breasts, they seem fine to me...(most breasts are a little less asymmetrical in real life so that's OK).

I think you're off to a fine start here. Maybe throw some texture on here dress or some kind of print?? Jewelry (necklace?? ankle bracelet??)?

Oh, and definitely check those lines on the arm. Makes it look like she's doing the Wolverine thing there.

Hope that helps.

D

[deanlegion]

She's really pretty! The dress does look scrunched up, not cut on an angle. My main suggestion is to research how to draw arms and legs. When you have a drawing of a beautiful lady like her, it's a shame when there are anatomical distractions. Oh, and those are some ugly shoes!

Don't give up!

[albone]

Hey Don! Thanks for looking. Below I fixed the picture up some. I added a little necklace, dumped the lines and fixed up the feet. Hmmm, I may try the ankle bracelet next time.

deanlegion-Hey thanks for thinking she's pretty. :) Hopefully the shoes are a bit of an improvement.

I went back and fixed some stuff up, let me know if I did right. :P

http://www.workshedstudio.com/images/hold/charlottePerezi_pencilsB.jpg

[FeelnMe]

like her. don't like her left arm.
:thumbs:

[chaosgoat]

Her dress isn't riding up, it's how it was cut. Or something, that's how it is though, though I did leave some frilly stuff off the ends.

Ah, ok. You may want to make it a little clearer. Maybe remove some of the bunching on both sides, so it looks like it's supposed to hang that way, and maybe make the long side a little longer. The best thing (which would also take the most work) would be to switch the dress around so that the long side is on the raised hip and the short is on the weight-bearing hip. That way it won't be mistaken for having ridden up. It also adds more emphasis to the pose. But it's your piece man. Run with it.

The shoes look much better. Thumbs up.

[Don.Edwards]

still not digging the left arm...but WOW....you really improved the hell outta that piece, sir!!

On the left arm, that position might be a bit awkward to draw, why not try a different position like her giving the reader the come hither thing with her index finger or maybe have it up and over her head and grabbing onto the other arm.

I dunno, you'll think of something, Al.

Good seeing you on here.


Nice job so far!

D