bubblegum draw-off

[masked_ramen]

Art for draw-off. Lemme hear some crits before I post.
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q80/kamenrider_ryuki/bubblegum_lineart.jpg

[Eric Rabbitsmasher]

Her face is too square and angular I think, show some indentation between the brow ridge and the cheekbone, give her mouth more curvature and soften the jawline a little.

The foreshortening on the right leg either isn't working at all, or her thigh is too short - if you bring the line at the top of the calf over the thigh instead of under it, it create more of a foreshortened effect, ditto the line where her buttock appears to be overlapping the thigh underneath, instead of vice versa.

If her thigh is supposed to be angled away from us, then it's too short, as is her far leg unless her legs are spread really wide.

In fact the whole pelvic region seems like it's on a different scale than her torso - I'm guessing you didn't spend any time on layout, and ran out of paper, trying to squeeze her bottom half into too little space. Give the foreshortening thing a try or crop it.

I suggest you add some reference study to your daily sketching, and try laying out a rough of the entire figure you want to draw before starting to detail it.

[The Dag]

she looks like a man..with boobs..

[masked_ramen]

Thanks for the comments. I did a little fixin'. Lemme hear some feedback.
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q80/kamenrider_ryuki/bubblegum_lineart-1.jpg