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[Static]

What's up gang here's another page i made up for myself, let me know what you think.

http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b139/tazbat/spectra-1.jpg

[cyxodus]

Could you post the art? Thanks.

[Jason Arthur]

http://www.jasonarthur.com/images/spectra-1_a.jpg

Your first problem was one of the same problems you had with the last page you posted. As the letterer you're going to be partly responsible for making sure that the artwork goes full bleed (meaning that it hits that outer "bleed" line). Most of the artists I work with will send me the page at 6.875 x 10.5 and that's a perfect fit. So if you have Photoshop then you can just open the art file there first and make sure you're set.

Next, where I have the vertical red marks: that's to show you that your text is off-center. Before merging your balloons together you can put the text in each individual balloon and use the ALIGN tool to make sure that the text gets centered.

I added a question mark for the one piece of dialogue, but that's just me being overly thorough.

And in the Spectre's balloon: that text is un-readable (at least at this resolution) and would be better served if you simply did the font in pure white or black (most likely).

Hope this helps. I like the font and the pacing you've established.

-- J

[theflash]

in the last balloon the guy says "You can you stop playing with me." that's really awkward. i think they added an extra "you" in there by accident because even reading it with different inflections, pauses and such it sounds goofy. so that's my crit. i have noticed just in the small amount of lettering i have done that you end up being the last line of spell and word usage check. if i have a question i generally ask the writer to make sure, unless of course i was the writer, and then i just kick myself in the ass and fix it on the fly. :har:

[Static]

thanks for the tips i'll an updated page up tomorrow.

[cyxodus]

Do us a favor and post the updated image in a new post. That way we can compare the new against the old.