Witchblade test script pages

[madman1]

Here's a couple of pages penciled by Andy Finlayson,inked up by me.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v260/Tschloendorn/Inks/Witch_p1inks.jpg
Original pencils (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/23979848/?qo=12&q=by%3Aandy-pandy&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps)
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v260/Tschloendorn/Inks/Witch_p2inks.jpg
Original pencils (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/23979888/?qo=11&q=by%3Aandy-pandy&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps)
I do have the other 3,and will post them soon.

[Jeremy Colwell]

Nice pages. Good feathering, too. It's kind of hard to tell at this small size, but the feathered areas do create a grey transition, so I assume it looks good full size, too. :) I think some of the exterior contours could use some beefing up in places to help the depth, but most of it reads just fine as it is. Specifically, I'd put some more line weight on the woman in Pg1Pn2 since the buildings in the bg have about the same as her now. But still, nice work and I look forward to seeing the rest of the set.

[madman1]

Thanks Jeremy.

[Jimmy]

Well, Jeremy is right your figure is lost in the page. she gets mixed in with the background. By adding more width to your line on your figure, will help her stand out.

Your use of white in black areas adds great texture.

-Jim

[madman1]

Here's the next set of pages.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v260/Tschloendorn/Inks/Witchpg3inks.jpg
Original pencils (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/23979923/?qo=16&q=by%3Aandy-pandy&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps)
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v260/Tschloendorn/Inks/Witchpg4inks.jpg
Original pencils (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/23979947/?qo=15&q=by%3Aandy-pandy&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps)
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v260/Tschloendorn/Inks/Witchpg5inks.jpg
Original pencils (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/23979974/?qo=14&q=by%3Aandy-pandy&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps)

As always let me know what you think.

[Jimmy]

Same problem, Remember there are THREE section to a page; Foreground - Mid & Background. Inkers need to add a sense of Depth to a page.

-Jim

[Jimmy]

see your line weight on her hair is the same around the figure. Hope this helps.